Betrayed – #FlashFiction
You can read this flash fiction story in One Hundred Voices anthology. Sorry, I can’t have it in the public domain. I sold the rights to Allegiant Publishing/Centum Press.
Thank you for your interest in my work. If you do read Betrayed in One Hundred Voices, feel free to leave me a comment and tell me what you think.
~ Sue
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Sue Coletta
Sue Coletta is an award-winning crime writer and an active member of Mystery Writers of America, Sisters in Crime, and International Thriller Writers. Feedspot and Expertido.org named her Murder Blog as “Best 100 Crime Blogs on the Net.” She also blogs on the Kill Zone (Writer's Digest "101 Best Websites for Writers"), Writers Helping Writers, and StoryEmpire. Sue lives with her husband in the Lakes Region of New Hampshire. Her backlist includes psychological thrillers, the Mayhem Series (books 1-3) and Grafton County Series, and true crime/narrative nonfiction. Now, she exclusively writes eco-thrillers, Mayhem Series (books 4-9 and continuing). Sue's appeared on the Emmy award-winning true crime series, Storm of Suspicion, and three episodes of A Time to Kill on Investigation Discovery. When she's not writing, she loves spending time with her murder of crows, who live free but come when called by name. And nature feeds her soul.
38 Comments
Bren La Lure
The Mistress of Macabre strikes again!
Your hypnotic appeal, the superb way you write, the ease with which you draw the reader into the story, it is all so hugely enjoyable….I love the way you lure us up blind alleys of expectation, love the way you lure us to assume the obvious and then bludgeon us with more twists and turns than a rampant corkscrew….totally spellbinding tale, brilliant thoughout with a knockout ending……loved it!!!
Sue Coletta
Aww…blush. Thanks, Shaggs! BTW, this is the piece that got picked up by Allegiant Publishing. Yay!!!
P.S. I fixed your typo. <3
Susan
How very interesting and heart breaking to read this from the point of view of the victim, and your finale was quite surprising.
Sue Coletta
I’m glad you enjoyed it, Susan. Thank you!
EVE ANDERSON
I feel it was me descending slowly in the murky waters. Slow, aware of my sorroundings, in love & in shock.
And that SOB, tending the corps as a garden. But, I will prevail.
Great, as always, Ms. Sue
Sue Coletta
Thank you, Eve. He is an SOB; you’re right. 🙂
Nicholas Rossis
Well played, Sue! Well played 😀
Sue Coletta
Why, thank you, kind sir. *curtsy* 🙂
Mae Clair
Oooh, so well done! I was scratching my head at the prison bars part, wondering what you were up to, and then that ending…nice payoff and nicely executed!
I’m currently in Sue Coletta mode having finished WINGS OF MAYHEM last night. I still have Shawnee voice in my head. How long do I have to wait for book two? Mayhem was so good!!!
I posted a review to Amazon early but it still hasn’t shown up *grumble* I did post to Goodreads too, so you can find it there. I’ll give Amazon two days to post and then I’ll try again. You know how they are *grumble, grumble*
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Sue Coletta
LOL Thank you, Mae. Yes, I saw the review this morning. Love it!!! Especially the part where you say you were jumpy when anyone spoke to you. So funny.
I’m bouncing between the sequel to Marred and Blessed Mayhem now. But every time I try to write something other than Blessed Mayhem Shawnee screams in my head. You know how she is. PITA. LOL It won’t be long, maybe mid-summer.
Mae Clair
YAY for that! And I glad the review finally showed up on the ‘Zon. I wouldn’t want Shawnee ticked off at me, LOL!
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Sue Coletta
LOL Yeah, me neither. 🙂
Craig
I got some really cool visuals from this one. The ending makes me think you need a puppy even more.
Sue Coletta
Hahahaha. Is it that obvious?
Roland Clarke
Great description and so emotional. And that twist was so clever, and craftily set up. Had me going off on all the wrong tangents.
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Sue Coletta
Yay! Thank you, Roland. 🙂
patriciaruthsusan
Great flash fiction, Sue. Outstanding description. It was an unbelievable twist at the end. So well written. —- Suzanne
Sue Coletta
Thank you, Suzanne. I’m so glad you enjoyed it.
Joe Broadmeadow
Entertaining and full of twists well crafted. Now, lets hunt the hunter!
Sue Coletta
Thanks, Joe. Sounds good to me!
M. L. Kappa
Beautifully creepy!
Sue Coletta
Thank you, M.L. That’s exactly what I was going for. 🙂
Gippy Adams Henry
Wow, I was worried for a while there, but should have known you would have a great twist! Each time, I don’t see it coming. Excellent! Will continue to sing your praises, Sue.
Sue Coletta
LOL Thanks, Gippy!
Julie Holmes, author
Awesome story, Sue! Excellent twist ending! So glad she got away. Thank you for sharing!
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Sue Coletta
Thanks, Julie!
Valerie
Sue, that was amazing. You’re so good at the twisty flash fiction story. I was hooked. Just thought the dying woman would expire with one last inhalation. The twist was beautiful, and unexpected.
Sue Coletta
Aww, thank you, Valerie. I’m so glad you enjoyed it.
Garry Rodgers
Again, Sue, I did not that coming! You are one wickedly talented writer! Excellent piece 🙂
Sue Coletta
Aww… blush. Thank you, Garry. 🙂
Traci Kenworth
Awesome twist!!
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Sue Coletta
Thanks, Traci!
Sheila Good
Sue, I was hooked from the first sentence. Such imagery and the twist at the end- superb.
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Sue Coletta
Thank you, Sheila. <3
Joyce Brennan
Flash fiction is my favorite and yours held me to the very end. Thanks for the ride.
Sue Coletta
Thank you, Joyce. I love flash fiction, too. It’s addictive.
Margot Kinberg
Oh, Sue, that is a powerful story! I love the perspective you take, and the twist at the end. What a unique look at a killer, too! Chilling!
Sue Coletta
I’m so glad you enjoyed it, Margot. 🙂